Thinking about those dark ladies and mysterious love objects…

(to the “inside out” of the prompt)


if i were trouble and you
were a dog
my internal vowels
would be strewn over two fields, my
b would be hung
about with l like long sausage.
the buzzards
would eat my r
and sip tea from my disturbed
while you rest your chin on crossed paws,
making sonnets about my bloody scent


We Write Poems Prompt #72 better inside out

Shame is the starting point for this prompt. Shame is often a strongly felt emotion. But shame in itself is also a useless state of being, restoring nothing that might have been damaged, and is at root a self-centered point of view. Most of its energy comes out of our not wanting it to be revealed. However this prompt is not “about” shame, but rather how it might be addressed in a manner that expresses and releases the experience. How you address and discover this process within a poem is the real challenge of this prompt.


6 responses to “Response”

  1. ravenswingpoetry says :

    Visceral and literal. Poor dog. Nice and unusual response to the prompt.


  2. mareymercy says :

    Wow – I love this!!!

  3. Mr. Walker says :

    I imagined a dog with a bloody muzzle at the end – that would make for an interesting sonnet.


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